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Post by Malefio on Jan 31, 2015 21:58:05 GMT
Just making the topic early, I will be writing the battle when I will be able to! I got all the plans.
I just wanted to say: don't make your log until I wrote the battle please!
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Post by Malefio on Feb 1, 2015 14:22:22 GMT
Music for the battle: www.youtube.com/watch?v=-l-wFlM1VE0---------------------Part 1: This is not scouting anymore (Zol) ------------------------ A giant electric machine was flying in the sky, really high above. The machine was not attacking, it was moving around the container, staying out of reach. 80 skitterleafs were scattered in front of the container, waiting for it to open. All they could hear is the creature slurping, and the electric fortress flying. The tension was high. The Heavy Yellow Wollywogs were standing on top of the container, installing some guillotines over the big door. They planned to cut the the creature in two immediately after it comes out. They would wait for anything looking like a head or main body to show itself. This would be easy, they didn’t need the other armies, not at all. Suddenly, some light blue pikmins climbed the container. The wollywogs turned around, they thought it was an ambush, but didn’t act impulsively. They knew the other armies were coming to help in this fight. - We don’t need you! What do you want? said a Wollywog -We are here to tell you what the plan is! Responded a pikmin -The plan is to cut the head of that thing with our guillotines, it’s as simple as that. -Hum not really… We will freeze the… -We don’t need you freezing anything. Go away! Zol’s troops knew General Pikpik was the enemy of their ally, they certainly wouldn’t accept their help. They could be backstabbing traitors as far as they know. The sniper were looking around, they knew more people were supposed to show up. Where were they? They didn’t have time to wonder, an alarm was set off… A really ominous alarm, accompanied by mechanical sounds. The container was opening… A first vine came out of the currently small opening, creeping it’s way around, to the top of the container. The light blue pikmin immediately jumped off the container, mumbling « We must wait for Vo Spader before freezing the drool… », as some tree pikmins arrived. The light blue Pikmin hid behind the big strong ones, waiting… Maybe Zol’s plan would actually work. Multiple vines were flying around while other were creeping on top of the container. Did the creature had any body or was it only a bunch of vines? The Wollywogs jumped in the air, trying to squish the tentacles, without really any effect. The vines were too flat, not solid enough to be squished. As the door fully opened, three wollywogs were grabbed by tentacle-like vines, while the slurping intensified. As three wollywogs jumped to use three guillotines and chop some vines, they saw the light blue pikmin were not helping them. They were letting them die… The guillotines chopped some vines, saving two wollywogs. The last Wollywog was doomed, he was the first one to see the creature : it was just two giant leaves, with no face. A giant tongue was waiting for him… The interior of the creature was black, just black. It almost looked like a black hole. The wollywog was eaten whole. As the door was fully open, the skitterleafs began using their sniper rifles to shoot down the vines. It was just in time, because the guillotines fell on the ground while the vines were flying around everywhere, and all the wollywogs were going straight to their doom, after being grabbed. The vines were moving fast and in an erratic fashion… Sniper rifles were not the best choice after all… No, they couldn’t lose all the wollywogs, it couldn’t end like this… Suddenly, a sound was heard in the distance… It was a good sound. The sound of an helicopter! --------------------END OF PART 1-------------------------- Losses so far : Zol : -1 Large Yellow Wollywog -1 Guillotine Writing part 2 right now! |
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Post by Malefio on Feb 1, 2015 15:19:27 GMT
--------------------------Part 2 : Gyrodistraction (Bolt) ------------------------
Two mechamins were waving their hands at their counterparts :
-Goodbye guys! We are going out to kick some creature’s butt!
All the mechamins screamed, it was a war scream. They were not called demons for nothing. The two waving mechamins entered the gyrocopter and went for a ride. They were already hearing someone shoot. They had to act quickly. Their plans was to distract the creature with their agile vehicle. They were certain it would be agile enough to avoid the vines, no matter how many there were. The Gyrocopter was made to avoid everything.
As they fly above skitterleafs snipers, while the giant plant devour 2 wollywogs, the two mechamins notice the electric fortress waiting above them. They are not helping? What are they doing? Their base is just there and they are waiting? The mechamins were mad, but Genral Pikpik was not the enemy right now. That giant green thing with a disgusting tongue was.
As the monster was ready to eat a fourth wollywog, the Gyrocopter fired his machine guns. The two mechamins looked at the snipers and mocked them : « Guys! You’re too slow! The cavalry has arrived! ». At they shot down the vines, the wollywogs jumped to safety, collecting the fallen guillotines.
Carnivorus head turned to the air… Was it actually seeing something even without eyes? The mechamins didn’t care, they were hear to distract the beast, while Zol’s snipers shoot at the body. It didn’t seem to phase the creature though.
The gyrocopter was flying around, avoiding each vines at the last second. The mechamins were mocking the green monster whille shooting some vines… being replaced almost instantly by a new one. « You can’t catch us! » The plant suddenly stopped swinging it’s vines around.
The snipers took that time to advance, maybe their snipers would affect the beats at a closer range. And the gyrocopter was covering them. Even if they were close enough to be grabbed and eaten by the creature, it didn’t even try to eat the skitterleafs… Something was going on…
As the gyrocopter was ready to avoid more vines, Carnivorus grabbed the three broken guillotines and threw them towards the flying vehicle… The three objects were going towards the gyrocopter at different angles.
« Oops… We can’t avoid that! »
The gyrocopter was hit by the guillotines and became out of control of the two pilots. They crashed as the skitterleafs tried to escape : they has lost their cover.
With the Gyrocopter in fire, the two mechamins retreated, looking at their allies being devoured.
-The gyrocopter is broken, we have to retreat! Said one of the mechamin.
-At least, we can retrieve it and repair it later!
-Sorry guys, we are gone!
The mechamins fled. The skitterleafs retreated. Bolt and Zol’s plan failed miserably. With his attackers gone, Carnivorus turned towards it’s next prey : the tree and light blue pikmins. As it grabbed many of them, a voice was heard :
« OH HELL NO YOU DON’T! »
--------------------------END OF PART 2-------------------------
Losses so far :
Zol :
-3 Large Yellow Wollywog
-3 Guillotines
-25 Skitterleafs/Pikminite Rifles
Bolt:
-1 Gyrocopter (Broken, not destroyed)
Writing part 3 right now!
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Post by Malefio on Feb 1, 2015 20:52:23 GMT
------------------------Part 3 : The plan is in motion (Captain Chaos, Clapton and Pik Gates) -------------
The vines were shot down by something hidden in the trees : « Now that the fools are gone, we can go down to a REAL plan! ». Captain Chaos came out of the trees, with 10 Chaos-at-legs shooting the vines, saving most of Pikpik’s troops. Unfortunately, the yellow mechanic spiders couldn’t save everyone. Two tree pikmins and ten light blue pikmins were eaten.
-Go join the dessert pikmins! They are still hidden in the trees! Chaos said.
-OVER HERE! Shouted Clapton.
The Chaos-at-legs were shooting the vines as they grabbed a pikmin, saving all of Pikpik’s troops who were running towards Clapton’s army.
Seven Fire Chaorbs came out of the forest, and advanced towards the plant, breathing fire in front of them : « It’s a good thing Pik Gates let me use the two Fire Chaorbs I gave him! »
The vines were burned, trying to grab the Fire Chaorbs, without success. The plant caught on fire, but drools flied everywhere, stopping the fire immediately. Ice creams and freezing water flied from the trees, into the creature’s mouth, while it was burning.
Suddenly, the plant charged towards the Chaos-at-legs, drooling on the Fire Chaorbs, making them become normal Chaorbs momentarily : « Get Pik Gates Fire Chaorbs out of here and everyone back off! »
Two Chaos at legs were shooting the vines trying to eat Sylvester and his friend, ignoring the othe Fire Chaorbs. Captain Chaos lost his five, but saved Pik Gates ones. As the creature smashed two Chaos-at-legs together, everyone was backing off in the forest.
-IT’S COMING CLOSER! Yelled Clapton, scared.
-SHOOT IT! Continued Chaos talking to his yellow spiders.
-Is the mouth frozen yet? Screamed the Sherbet pikmins.
The Chaos-at-legs were shooting the creature, while going backwards, protecting Pikpik and Clapton’s troops, running around the forest. Sometimes, some Sherbet Pikmins fell down, being grabbed by a vine. Going backwards, the aiming of the yellow spiders wasn’t perfect, he couldn’t save them all. Being bigger, the Tree Pikmins were grabbed easily, but with their drills, they saved themselves.
Captain Chaos pressed a button on a bracelet on his wrist. It emitted a signal. Suddenly, some Chaos Snitchbugs appeared and dropped twenty Dwarf Chaorbs behind the creature. Five of the snitchbugs tried to distract Carnivorus by flying near him, but they were eaten. The others went back to Wistful wilds. The Dwarf Chaorbs advanced, while five Chaos-at-legs retreated. Leaving three to protect the other two armies.
The monster turned his attention to the dwarf chaorbs, who tried to drill trough the vines. With less movement and less shooting from the yellow spiders, Carnivorus managed to eat five of them, before the barrage of ice cream and freezing water finally froze all the drool from the mouth.
With his mouth closed, the giant plant seemed confused. It grabbed the nearest Chaos-at-legs and threw him towards the Ice cream pikmins and light blue Pikmins, crushing a few of them.
-Well… That didn’t worked as planned! Said Clapton.
Suddenly, the creature smashed everything around itself, crushing a few Dwarf Chaorb. The mouth reopened itself in a devastating explosion of pointy ice shards. A few creatures were impaled.
-NO! NO! NO! NO! NO! Screamed Chaos
-WE WILL ALL BE EATEN! Continued Clapton
Suddenly, a voice came out of nowhere : « I’M HERE! THROW THESE IN IT’S MOUTH! »
-------------------------PART 3 END------------------------------
Losses so far (If the dead troops were carrying anything, it's also lost) :
Zol :
-3 Large Yellow Wollywog
-3 Guillotines
-25 Skitterleafs/Pikminite Rifles
Bolt:
-1 Gyrocopter (Broken, not destroyed)
Captain Chaos:
-3 Chaos-at-legs
-5 Fire Chaorb
-13 Dwarf Chaorb
-5 Chaos Snitchbug
Clapton:
-15 Sherbet Pikmins
-7 Ice Cream Pikmins
General Pikpik:
-2 Tree Pikmins
-7 Light Blue Pikmins
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Post by Malefio on Feb 1, 2015 21:09:44 GMT
---------------------Conclusion : The magnet bombs (Vo Spader and General Pikpik) ----------------
-About damn time! Said Chaos.
Vo Spader arrived with a lot of troops. They were transporting something, it looked like bombs. Vo Spader explained the plan to everyone : they needed to drop all 20 magnet bombs in the creature’s mouth to shut it for just enough time for Pikpik’s electric fortress to drop a fire bomb. Captain Chaos called back some snitchbugs, sot hey could drop the magnet bombs from the air.
An explosion was heard as the creature ate the bombs. It looked like gravity was turning upside down, closing the giant mouth. The ice users froze the remaining drool for the second time, the creature was stuck. All it’s tentacles were graviting towards the center of the plant, making them useless.
The electric fortress lowered it altitude, then began to shock the creature, while opening an hatch. A giant bomb fell down, while everyone retreated. The giant plant caught on fire, with nothing to put it out. As the creature was on fire, unable to move, the electric fortress was sending unrelentless waves of electricity, until the creature totally stopped moving.
The creature wasn’t green anymore, it was black, totally black. After a last wave of electricity, it fell into dust. It was defeated. The world was saved!
--------------------THE END----------------------------------
Losses so far (If the dead troops were carrying anything, it's also lost) :
Zol :
-3 Large Yellow Wollywog
-3 Guillotines
-25 Skitterleafs/Pikminite Rifles
Bolt:
-1 Gyrocopter (Broken, not destroyed)
Captain Chaos:
-3 Chaos-at-legs
-5 Fire Chaorb
-13 Dwarf Chaorb
-5 Chaos Snitchbug
Clapton:
-15 Sherbet Pikmins
-7 Ice Cream Pikmins
General Pikpik:
-2 Tree Pikmins
-7 Light Blue Pikmins
-1 fire bomb
Vo Spader:
-20 magnet bombs
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Post by Bloodmancer on Feb 1, 2015 22:02:52 GMT
How many days will I need to repair the copter?
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Post by Malefio on Feb 1, 2015 22:06:39 GMT
How many days will I need to repair the copter? How many days did it take to build it? |
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Post by Bloodmancer on Feb 1, 2015 22:08:24 GMT
20 days.
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Post by Malefio on Feb 1, 2015 22:09:05 GMT
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Post by deviantsword on Feb 1, 2015 22:15:08 GMT
-- I GOTCHHOOUUU!! While repairing it can you upgrade it as well? Just a thought...
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Post by Malefio on Feb 2, 2015 0:02:05 GMT
So a few questions:
1. Any comments on my writing? (Don't say bad english, my first language is french, so bad english is probably there xd)
2. Is anyone against the fact I made some creative choices (Like making pendragon be late)
3. Do you like that I made this in parts with different point of view?
4. Anything else?
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Post by lonewander on Feb 2, 2015 0:08:07 GMT
It was great,had a lot of suspense at each part and made it feel like everyone was sorta working together. We never did figure out what it wanted to devour though. Didn't see it go for anything in particular. Creative choices made sense - not everything will go off without a hitch. Look foward to these future boss fights.
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Post by deviantsword on Feb 2, 2015 0:47:52 GMT
Your writing style was very nice. Breaking it up into multiple parts was excellent! It kept the suspense up, while allowing time for story development of the battle.
Honestly the casualties inflicted in this battle was way lower than I anticipated! The way you wrote the battle made it very engaging and made us all intrigued. This battle is one that will be talked about for a while, I mean there is a guillotine with pikmins named engraved on it! Not to mention a monument is being constructed!
Your English was excellent by the way. If you hadn't told me, I would have never known it wasn't your first language.
All in all, the battle was great. The writing was engaging. The drama was real.
10/10.
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Post by Bloodmancer on Feb 2, 2015 0:53:49 GMT
I loved every second of it, don't worry about your English, I understood every sentence! I definitely coulden't wait for each part, I had a lot of fun reading it, probably more than I did participating in it! 18000000000/10
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